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Post by The Dark Knight on Jan 29, 2006 23:05:06 GMT -5
Can't wait for these new stories All Star. I have yet to read your Penguin one though
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Post by Hush Riddler on Jan 30, 2006 20:36:38 GMT -5
[shadow=green,left,300]Sorry if this one brings back memories of the "Riddle of the Minotaur", but here goes nothing!
Okay, contrary to my previous story, this one DOES follow the script of “The Batman”. Huzzah! No gore, no violence, yay. I call this one:
IF THE HAT FITS…
Gotham has recently been terrorized by a pair of thieves dressed as a walrus in a tuxedo, and the other dressed as a carpenter, who carries a large mallet. Batman is watching from a building up above, and he sees in the dead of night indeed a large, fat, plump walrus, and a man in a carpenter’s outfit and an enormous plastic head.
Batman: Well, there’s the two lovebirds… (He swoops in from the building and finds them robbing a casino.) Okay boys, time to take it in.
Walrus: Hatman says to stop the bat.
Carpenter: Hatman is supreme. (They attack Batman, and actually put up a pretty tough fight, despite being in large, plastic costumes. Batman eventually removes their headwear and discovers…)
Batman: Penguin is the walrus? Joker is the carpenter?
Joker: Eggh… Where am I? What happened to my cell? Where’s that orderly who was harassing me?
Penguin: Eh? Where are the Kubaki Twins? Where’s… Batman? What… how did you find me?
Batman: You were robbing a casino. Don’t you remember anything?
Joker: A casino? That’s not funny! How is robbing a casino funny? A bank has its laughs but…
Penguin: I swear Batman, I didn’t do anything… yet.
Batman: You two are going back to Arkham… maybe Prof. Strange can drill your minds… (Batman comes back the next night to investigate, and finds a card with a 10/6 on it. He takes it back to the Batcave, where Alfred enters with Bruce’s dinner.)
Alfred: What’s that there Master Bruce?
Batman: I don’t know… It appears to be some sort of hat card… Look at this though. (Batman cuts through silk covering the card and reveals tons of wiring inside.)
Alfred: My word…
Batman: And judging from the wiring, it’s highly advanced TBL technology. Temporal Brain Lobes…
Alfred: What does that mean, Master Bruce?
Batman: It means that, given a physically close enough encounter, it can beam orders into the brain, forcing your body to do things that you are not intending it to do. Apparently, this technology’s side effect is that the receiving brain contains no memory with the thought of the actions, even though the brain and body interact with many things.
Alfred: A moment, sir… (He leaves and comes back with a book.) That hat card design looks very similar to the hat card worn by the Mad Hatter from “Alice in Wonderland”.
Batman: Must be dealing with a fanatic… Here’s the most interesting thing though… This chip here, it has the Wayne Enterprises logo on it. I think I’d better take a visit to the TBL department tomorrow…
Bruce walks into the TBL development’s office the next day with Lucius Fox.
Fox: Bruce, what did you say the police wanted?
Bruce: Well, Commissioner Gordon stopped by this morning and delivered this: (He shows Lucius Fox the 10/6 dated hat card and shows him the chip with the Wayne Enterprises logo on it.)
Fox: Well, Bruce. Let’s head in and see what we can find. (They walk up to the secretary.) Hi, we’re looking for Jervis Tech, head of TBL departments?
Alice: Well, if he hasn’t gone to lunch, he’s in the back, testing his equipment.
Bruce: Thanks. (They walk into his office, where a table rests with a pile of old computer chips and nano wires and some papers and records.) Mr. Tech?
Jervis: Yes?! (He comes out from the back room.) Oh, Mr. Wayne. How may I help you this fine day, kaloo kalay?
Bruce: …Yeaaa… I got a visit from police Commissioner Gordon, and he stopped by to show me this: (He produces form his pocket the 10/6 electronic hat card and the microchip.) He pointed out to me that a microchip from the inside of this card had the Wayne Enterprises logo on it… Can you help us out as to who might be developing such technology?
Jervis: Well, what did he say the card does?
Bruce: He said that the card was marked with the Wayne Enterprises logo.
Jervis: So it is! And I recognize this chip too! Well, I’ll have to do research on this chip to see what its been used for… Come back in a week’s time, and I’ll have some answers for you then, Mr. Wayne.
Bruce: Thanks, Mr. Tech.
Jervis: (Shakes Bruce’s hand.) Oh, no sir, please, call me Jervis!
Bruce turns to exit, and notices a book laying open. It turns out to be “The Adventures of Alice in Wonderland: Through the Looking Glass. He looks skeptically back at Jervis Tech, who is fumbling around and doesn’t notice Bruce. Bruce again turns to leave, but sees a large poster of the Mad Hatter giving tea to the Marsh Hare and Alice. He again looks back at Jervis Tech as he returns to his back room. Bruce finally exits. Batman comes back to Jervis Tech’s office and looks around the room. He discovers three extra 10/6 hat cards, as well as three different version of both “Alice in Wonderland” books, along with a wooden box of books with the words “The Complete Works of Lewis Carol” carved on the side. As he is about to leave, he finds on the coat rack a large, crimson top hat with one of the 10/6 cards sticking in the hat’s ribbon. He returns in the morning as Bruce to question Mr. Tech but discovers the office empty. Later that week there is yet another break-in to the Gotham City Bank of Trust, and Batman yet again finds the walrus and the carpenter. They run, leading Batman to a theme park, and run into a building titled “Riddle of the Sphinx”, where he finds Riddler at the top of the steps.
Riddler: Hello Batman, weren’t expecting me here, were you?
Batman: So you’ve been behind this mind-control experiment!
Riddler: Oh no, not in the slightest! That was all thanks to Jervis Tech!
Batman: So, he’s been selling you mind-control technology.
Riddler: In a sense. I knew I couldn’t best you the old fashioned way, so I decided to use a string of crimes that would lead you to the wrong man.
Batman: So, you forced him to make the chips for you!
Riddler: Again, no. He did it as a deal. I’d provide him money to make his gadgets, and in return he’d lead you to me. Inside, you’ll find much of Mr. Tech’s associates inside. The building is set to blast in less then… 30 minutes, to fun through the funhouse and find them!
Batman: Simple. Hmph. You may have used different tactics, Riddler, but your still the same in truth.
Riddler: Pah. Small talk. We’ll see if that’s true. (He runs inside, and Batman gives chase. The doors slam behind him as he exits. He finds himself in a large room with a sphinx in the center. As he approaches it, the eyes light blue and it speaks.)
Sphinx #1: Cut off my head, two replace it. Cut off two heads, and four more replace the original two. What am I?
Batman: That’s easy. A hydra.
Riddler’s Voice: Exactly so, Batman. But yet I’ve added an improvement to the funhouse. (Suddenly three white cobras slither up to Batman and attempt to bite him.) I wouldn’t make so much work out of it, Batman. They are White Persian Cobras, a blinded species of snake. They can’t see you, but they can smell your fear, your sweat. (Batman, who is apparently swearing a great deal, jumps over the cobras and tosses down several tear-gas bombs, which stun the cobras long enough for Batman to get away. He comes across another room with another sphinx.)
Sphinx #2: It is metal, long, yet thin. It brings blood and sweat and tears. It can be sharp of flat, whichever way you slice it. What is it?
Batman: It is… a blade.
Riddler’s Voice: Of course. Many of them in fact. (Suddenly a large blade penetrates through the opposite wall, and the wall moves towards Batman.)
Batman: Riddler! What’s the point?
Riddler: Ha! You’re about to find out! (Batman runs to the door, but finds it is locked. He sees three keys next to it, labeled A, C, D. He tries D, but instead of the door opening, another blade pops out of the wall, bringing the number to two blades. Batman tries C, and the door opens, and he slips through just before the blades run him through.) A lucky guess, that’s all.
Batman: No, it was a musical puzzle. The key of C has no sharps, but the D key has two, and the A key has three sharps.
Riddler’s Voice: You have yet another Riddle for you, Batman. Answer it quickly.
Sphinx #3: You are lost in Camelot, yet you come across the land where Kings and Queens contend. Where are you?
Batman: Another easy one. The answer is a chessboard.
Riddler’s Voice: That alone won’t say you Batman. You’d better change your name from Batman to Mathman if you hope to see tomorrow. (Batman looks around to see about 50 doors.) There are 50 doors Batman. 10 of them release poisonous gas into the room. 25 of them can really heat things up, and 14 of them lead to dead ends. Which one, which one? Oh, the suspense is killing me!
Batman: (Batman looks about and sees doors marked with different numbers. He opens door 12-1-22-1 and liquid hot lava begins to pour from the sphinx’s mouth and surround the room. Batman suddenly remembers Riddler saying changing his name from Batman to Mathman. He remembers the Riddler’s answer was a chessboard. He looks around until he finds door # 4096 and jumps in.) Riddler?! Riddler, where am I?
Unknown: It’s not Riddler’s game anymore, Batman.
Batman: Wait a minute, I know that voice… you’re…
Hatter: JERVIS TECH! But I’d prefer it if you would call me The Mad Hatter! Hahaha!
Batman: Where’s the Riddler?
Hatter: This isn’t his game anymore! He doesn’t even know where you are! I lead you to this chessboard! And now, if you have any hopes for survival, you’ll play by my rules, or it’s the end of the game! (Batman begins to walk forward three spaces, but a giant flame leaps up and blocks off his path.) Ah-ah-ah! Batman, I told you to play by the rules! You either move like a black knight, or you’ll parish as the black knight!
A rather large chess game ensues. Batman tells his giant robotic pieces where to move by shouting out orders such as “Queen to E4”. When the pieces take another piece, the defeated piece bows to the other piece and leave the board. However, the Mad Hatter had people playing as his pieces, such as his secretary, Alice, playing as the Queen, the Joker and Penguin playing as Bishops, Lucius Fox as the King, and all other of his pieces are robotic. Eventually Batman takes the Hatter’s king and the Mad Hatter runs for it. Batman chases and eventually the Mad Hatter decides to fight Batman by swinging a heart-scepter around as a weapons, screaming “Off with your head!”. Eventually Riddler joins the fight, followed by the Walrus and the Carpenter. Batman knocks Riddler out and knocks off Tech’s hat, and breaks the mind-control helm inside the hat. Joker and Penguin, as well as Lucius Fox and Tech’s secretary all regain consciousness, however they can’t remember how they got there. Mad Hatter, Penguin, Joker and Riddler are all sent back to Arkham, even though Joker and Penguin did nothing wrong. [/shadow]
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Post by ??The Riddler?? on Jan 30, 2006 20:55:10 GMT -5
[glow=green,2,300] The best story I have ever read!!!! Hero for you when an hour passes, guys I'm afraid I am having trouble coming up with an ending for my story. It might take a long time for me to come up with an end, either I shall forget the story or wait a while til I get an idea. I am really trying to push my brain into writing a Riddler story but it's quite harder than you think... I will do my best and till then I will write more riddles! By the way excellent riddles as well partner you are a great story writer. Oooh I have an idea since I don't write stories that well, I will help anyone in need of making up riddles! Just tell me the subject and bammo there you go I shall be the Conundrum Champion!!! [/glow]
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Post by The Dark Knight on Jan 30, 2006 21:37:19 GMT -5
If Riddler says it's the best she's read, Im going to definately have to read it soon. Im busy with tests this week. Dark Nightwing, Im sure you'll come up with something estatic. Just let the mind flow. Anyone else got any reviews for my Face to Face episode? I admit that some things Nightwing said may have caused it as a downfall, but I'd also like to hear other people's opinions.
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Post by Dark Nightwing on Jan 30, 2006 21:38:56 GMT -5
"If the Hat Fits" 9/10
That was a good one HR. I was worried that you were just copying Mad as a Hatter at the beginning, but I really like what you did with it. I still say it is a little too similar and the end reminded me of Harry Potter. The riddles were clever (and your welcome) and the plot twist was neat.
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Post by The Dark Knight on Jan 30, 2006 21:50:24 GMT -5
9.5/10
Astounding Hush! Just astounding! I loved every part of the plot! It kept me wondering really who was the real criminal mastermind. I loved the riddles, which were indeed veyr very clever! Especially the A,C,D one. Fantastic story, good action, and humor! This deserves to be praised. You're the new joe_destructive!!!
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Post by The Dark Knight on Jan 30, 2006 21:51:59 GMT -5
The Dark Nightwing, if you would like, I could rearrange the whole Face to Face story to only include Clayface, but it will really affect the outcome. If you would like the idea, please PM me or something. I'd like to make a good story that everyone enjoys
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Post by All Star Batman on Jan 31, 2006 20:38:53 GMT -5
Okay, you know what? I'm going to skip my other stories and write my three part series finale. ;D
Expect part one this Saturday: TWO SIDES TO EVERY COIN
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Post by Hush Riddler on Feb 6, 2006 21:28:57 GMT -5
[shadow=green,left,300]Thanks, I'm glad everyone liked my story, and LC, I'm def. NOT the new j_d, but I really appreciate the praise. You know good reviews acctually keep a writing coming out with better and better stuff. I tried not to make that chess scene sound too much like the end to MaD as a Hatter, and not too much like the chess riddle from "What is Reality?". I never realized it might cause some people to think of the Harry Potter scene... Thanks for the feed-back... I'm thinking of my new story as we speak, which features the Joker and Harley Quinn, about them leading "respectable" lives.[/shadow]
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Post by The Dark Knight on Feb 14, 2006 19:51:20 GMT -5
Thats good Dark Nightwing, its nice to know that someone will post a story on here, its been ages
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Post by Dark Nightwing on Feb 21, 2006 17:12:04 GMT -5
"Unmasked"
This episode starts with Bruce in a business meeting. The whole time, he is staring at his watch, ready to go. The scene goes to a flashback. Batman is speaking with Gordon on top of the GCPD rooftop. It is nightime and the batsignal is shining in the background.
Gordon: "Bullock is being transferred to Arkham tomorrow afternoon. We have our the police department on it, but I was hoping for some extra protection." Batman: "Is that final? I am a little busy tomorrow afternoon." G: "Sorry, but I can't reschedule this. It wouldn't be fair to them. What about the boy wonder?" B: "The boy wonder?" G: "Robin is rapidly becoming a legend in his own right. Take a look." He hands Batman a newspaper. G: "Don't you get the paper? What do you have that is so important?" B: "Meeting at the Hall of Justice with the Wonder Twins." G: "Fine, keep your secrets." B: "I'll be there."
The scene cuts to Bruce back at the batcave the next morning. Bruce is just about to get suited up, when he is stopped by Alfred. Alfred: "Master, don't you have an important business meeting today?" Bruce: "I am feeling sick. I won't be able to attend." Alfred sighs of dissapproval. A: "Part of having a duel life is attending to both of those lives. You have as much of a responsibility to your company as you do for the dark knight." Bruce gives a face of stubborn submission.
The scene cuts back to Bruce in his meeting. The head speaker is asking for input, but Bruce is just looking at his watch. Upon realizing that he is needed, he requests a fifteen minute break. He goes to a bathroom and looks out the window. The police convoy is passing in the streets below. In a rooftop on the other side is Robin and Batgirl. The armored car containing Two Face is quiet. Bruce is starting to relax a little. Suddenly, the armored car starts swerving and then running into the police cars. Robin and Batgirl start to grapple down. Bruce opens the window and is about to make an escape, when he is called back into his meeting (much to his dissappointment).
The POV is switched to Robin. He grapples down and lands on top of the armored car. Batgirl just swings around, trying to stay in touch with the car (and to save Robin should he fall). Robin is taken on a wild ride. Eventually, he climbs forward enough to see Two Face (Bullock) is driving and the other guards are all escaped. Robin takes a Robinrang (or a Batarang I guess) and slams it into the windshield. Robin then lets go of the car. Batgirl swoops and catches him.
Batgirl: "Don't EVER do that again."
The Robinrang in the windshield starts beeping and then explodes. The armored car swerves off the road, into the lake. Batgirl is in shock.
Batgirl: "You killed him." Robin: "No I didn't. That windshield is busted. All he had to do is jump out. I'm just dissappointed that he got away." B: "You are far too confident."
Police Chief Darby is the first one to stop to talk to them. Darby: "Very nice! They don't call you the boy wonder for nothing. You should join the force when you're old enough. The only bad part is that you have to fill out paperwork for stunts like that." Batgirl is a mix of angry and jealous. Darby sees this and adds praise for her catch. Over the police radio, they hear Two Face over the radio.
TF: "That was quite a stunt. I should be thanking you Robin. They would've been chasing me all night. Just want to let you know that once I am done with the two I have on my list, then the Dark Night and the Boy Wonder are next."
Robin takes control of the Batcycle and Batgirl hops on the back. Batgirl: "Why don't I have a nickname? I was here before you. You shouldn't get an alias before me." Robin: "I recorded the message as soon as I heard start to talk. I think there was some voices in the background." B: "Who do you think those two are that he is after now?" R: "Maybe one is Gordon. I don't know."
They arrive at the Batcave. Robin analyzes the tape. In the background is numerous voices. They don't recognize any of them, until they hear Bruces voices.
R: "Wayne Enterprises!!!"
The go back there as fast as the can. At the top of the building is Two Face. Tied up on either side of him is Justice and Black Mask. Robin hits a switch to the bike. The front tire pops off and a rope is attached to it. The tire wraps around the W at the top. The bike then retracts the rope, pulling them up to the rooftop of the building.
Batgirl: "I'm missing Joker's joke about the tire swing."
Robin and Batgirl arrive at the top.
Two Face: "You're right on time... Not quite the dynamic duo. Am I not good enough for Batman? I guess I'll have to show what I'm worth. Kill two birds with one stone."
Two Face picks up both Justice and Black Mask. Upon doing so, Justice kicks out of his grip and cuts herself free. She then throws a bomb on him and Two Face goes off the top of the building. Robin grapples his feet and uses all of his strength to swing him back on top of the building. Amanda grabs Black Mask and pulls of his mask. His face is a wreck. It is completely deformed and scar ridden.
BM: "So, you finally see what happened. You weren't the only one that lost something that night. The night your parents died was the night that I went from well respected to police chief, to exiled freak. I knew you would find me someday. I was the seed that cast you against the world. I was the one once known as Chief O'Hara."
Justice can't even move she is in such shock and is so angry.
BM: "As for you Harvey Bullock, I find it ironic that you consider me your worst enemy. we are exactly the same. Ex-cops, deranged, and psychopathic. I look forward to seeing you create your own deformed loonatic. Things will have come full circle then."
Justice rips her mask off. Robin is very surprised to see it is Amanda Butcher. She grabs Black Mask and goes to throw him over the edge. But he has managed to free himself by this time. Those two start fighting. Batgirl notices that Two Face has went down the stairs. He has made his way into the boardroom. Batgirl arrives. Two Face grabs Bruce out of the seat and pulls out his coin. As he flips the coin, Batgirl uses her grapple to knock it right out of the air. Bruce grabs Two Face and flips him over his shoulder knocking him out on the table.
Bruce: "I do Tae Bo every once in awhile." to the astounded board members.
Robin is still following the fight between Justice and Black Mask. It is jumping from rooftop to rooftop. Many explosives are used. Robin can barely keep up. After an intensive fight (I may go back and fill this in with details later) Justice manages to grab Black Mask. She pulls out a sword. She is about to slit his throat when Robin jumps out and stops her.
R: "Don't do this. Revenge isn't the answer." J: "I've waited my whole life for this moment. Do not deny me this."
Robin pulls out his staff and they have a weapons fight. In the end, Robin manages to disarm her.
J: "All right, I guess I won't do this"
Robin is relieved, but unfortunately, she grabs the unconscious Blask Mask and throws him over the edge. Robin tries to catch him the same way he caught Two Face, but Justice retrieves her sword and cuts the line. She then retreats, leaving Robin alone on the rooftop. The episode ends with Robin in a true grimmness, looking down at the street that she just fled to.
Robin: "So you have decided."
The End
This is the end of my season. My next projects will be refining episodes that I put on the original members' creativity? page.
In order to understand most anything in this episode, you probably need to have read the rest of my season. I hope everyone liked the conclusion of this story arc. I have had it in my mind for quite awhile. Let me know what you thought of it.
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Post by ??The Riddler?? on Feb 21, 2006 17:20:08 GMT -5
Well Done Dark Nightwing!
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Post by Jack-Ups on Feb 21, 2006 17:26:35 GMT -5
Yeah everbodys was exellent well done guys!
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Post by Hush Riddler on Feb 21, 2006 18:13:17 GMT -5
YES! YES DARK NIGHTWING YES! An excellently executed story! (Try saying that 3x fast. Also try saying "red leather, yellow leather" and "aluminum, linolium, aluminum, tin" 3x fast.) Great story, one of the best stories I've ever read that had Two Face in it. Great job, 8.5/10!!!
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Post by Dark Nightwing on Feb 21, 2006 21:27:25 GMT -5
Nice to hear so many positive reviews. I really tried to bring some resolution to the events following The Green Team. I had setup Robin's relationship with Justice and Justice's relationship with Black Mask so as to bring to an exciting conclusion.
I hope you guys will enjoy next season. Part of me really wants to tell you what I have planned, but I never like to ruin surprises.
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Post by The Dark Knight on Feb 22, 2006 18:27:31 GMT -5
Very nice Dark Nightwing! (And pardon me for not being here to wish you a Happy Birthday) Quite a fun episode. I loved the "meeting with the Wonder Twins" line. That gave me a good laugh! 8.5/10 as well!
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Post by ??The Riddler?? on Feb 22, 2006 18:38:16 GMT -5
YES! YES DARK NIGHTWING YES! An excellently executed story! (Try saying that 3x fast. Also try saying "red leather, yellow leather" and "aluminum, linolium, aluminum, tin" 3x fast.) Great story, one of the best stories I've ever read that had Two Face in it. Great job, 8.5/10!!! Also try saying Toyboat 3times fast. I like the story Dark Nightwing I really don't like grading though, but since it's an awesome story I give it a 8.5 as well. Why do my stories have to suck? Answer, because,"Any writer who can write a good Riddler story should be proud of themselves." Why am I so stubborn, lol. I shall write a story for I shall not let you all down. Sorry about not finishing my last story What happens is Dark Nightwing ends up being saved by Batgirl as Batman dangles Riddler over the sharks and he gives Batman the remote control to let Yin and Misty Ree down and his life is spared and goes to Arkham. I am sorry I suck at writing stories, but I know I'll have a good one some day.
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Post by Dark Nightwing on Feb 22, 2006 22:21:23 GMT -5
I guess the average is an 8.5. Can you guys think of anything to improve this episode. I may tweak the fight scenes. I find those hard to write. The only fight scene I think I pulled off well was in The Scared and the Fearless. That one I was very proud of.
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Post by ??The Riddler?? on Feb 26, 2006 17:43:53 GMT -5
It is a dark day for Bruce Wayne in Gotham, seeing it’s the day of his parents demise (from over 20 years ago). Bruce and Alfred stroll along Gotham cemetery to see Thomas and Martha Wayne’s graves. Bruce stares and has a flashback; he remembers the fateful day as a tear runs along his face.He lays a rose for his mother and father and sighs, as he sees another man doing the same. Bruce then walks to his car as he thinks if his parents are proud of his choices, Alfred opens the door for Bruce as they drive to Wayne Industries. Bruce is currently working on some paperwork as his PDA goes Off, the bat wave tells him there has been a breakout at Arkham. He speeds over there in the Batmobile, and hears a scream for help. The scream came from Riddler’s cell as Batman runs down the halls to it. But instead of Riddler being in there, one of Arkham’s security guards replaced him. The man says, “ I was just giving Riddler his meal and he hits me with that cane of his! Then he steals my keys and makes a run for it, knocking out the rest of the guards with sleeping gas!” Batman, “ Next time make sure to take away his cane, then you won’t have to deal with it. Let’s see what I can find, Riddler can’t help leaving a clue to his next crime.” (Batman begins to search, as he finds nothing) Batman,” That’s unusual…” (The security guard at Arkham informs Batman on the latest news) Guard,” Detective Yin has come back, do you think there’s a connection?” Batman,” That’s a riddle I’ll have to figure out…” (Batman dashes out of Arkham and goes to Gotham Headquarters, seeing it’s Yin’s birthday.) He sees Yin being adored by many who have missed her, Batman enters as soon as everyone but Yin is left. Batman:” Did you hear the news about Riddler?” Yin:” Yes and that’s not all I’ve heard lately you got a sidekick didn’t you?” Batman:” Yes, but that’s not why I’m here, Riddler is probably after you and….” (A huge cake comes in and is placed in front of Yin.) Deliverer: “ Is there a Detective Yin in here?” Yin:” Yes, why?” Deliverer:” The cake came with a card.” (Gives card to Yin and leaves as Yin reads it aloud) “What is it that comes around once a year but has multiple dates? Answer:” A birthday, Happy Birthday Yinzy!” Batman:” it’s a trap!” (The cake turns out to be fake, Riddler and his team jump out and attack) Riddler:” Yinzy what a surprise, did you miss me?” (Batman and Riddler’s henchmen fight in the background) Yin:” Miss you?!? You tried to kill me in your crimes!” Riddler:’ Aw that was old times, lets leave room for the new!” (Presses a button on his cane that dispenses bluish-green smoke everywhere, Riddler then grabs Yin and puts her to sleep with his cane’s sleeping gas.) Riddler:” Team! Let’s leave we have what we came for, but listen up Batman! What is black and white and red all over? For that is a ‘Mystery’ you will soon find out.” (Riddler along with Yin and his henchmen/women are gone.) Batman returns to Wayne Manor as he ponders about Riddler’s riddle, Alfred hands Bruce a newspaper. Bruce glances at it and realizes that newspaper is the answer. He stares at the newspaper and remembers what Riddler said,” That is a ‘mystery’ you will soon find out.” Bruce:” Riddler said mystery instead of riddle so maybe something in the paper might tell me. (He looks through) tonight there is going to be a magic show staring ‘Misty Ree’!” Alfred:” But what does a magic show have to do with Detective Yin?” Bruce:” No time to sit around and wait to find out.” Alfred:” But sir don’t you think he will get suspicious if you were to go as Batman?” Bruce:” Your right I have a plan but we will need batgirl’s help.” Meanwhile at Barbara’s house…. Commish:” Barb, how about you and I attend tonight’s Magic Show?” Barbara:” Sure thing pop” Commish:” great, you need more excitement in your life.” (Barbara smiles as her dad answers a call) Commish:” Any news on Riddler?” Batman:” Not currently, but I’ll be on the watch. Are you attending tonight’s Magic Show I hear it’s one night only?” Commish:” My daughter and I are attending, good luck with Riddler.” Batman:” Have fun at the show.” (He smiles, as his plan to get Barbara to go is a success) Barbara:” Batman, awesome and Riddler? I better bring some Advil just in case.” At The Show…. (Barbara and Commish are in front row as she switches phones with her dad in case she needs to contact Batman… Bruce appears on the balcony with his Batman outfit stuffed in his carrying bag.) “Welcome ladies and gentlemen, boys and girls to ‘The World of Magic’ I am Misty Ree, may I have a volunteer from the audience please?” (A man with a ponytail and glasses approaches the stage Dark Nightwing) Misty Ree:” Give a big hand for this young man. What I want you to do it stand in this box and we will make you disappear and reappear okay?” (The man nods, Misty Ree’s stage staff put a sheet over the box as they dim the lights when Riddler’s henchmen approach the stage with staff costumes) Misty Ree:” As you all count to five our volunteer will disappear!” Audience:” One, Two, Three, Four…. Five!” (The man is gone and Misty Ree is dragged off the stage by Riddler’s henchmen and woman, Riddler then approaches the stage) Riddler:” People of Gotham, behold as I the Riddler pull off the trick of a lifetime! Observe my two victims.” (Riddler presses a button on his cane and Yin is dangling over a huge tank of sharks in a straitjacket and chains and so is Misty Ree) Batman:” I know you are here, but as you see if you try to save one of the victim’s the other one shall meet there demise, but if you can solve my riddles correctly they shall be spared but miss a riddle one victim will be lowered towards their fate!!!” [glow=green,2,300]Here's Part 3 (It's very short but I'm working on Part 4, I should hopefully have it up by tonight) [/glow] (Commissioner Gordon approaches the stage with his gun pointed towards Riddler as Babara rushes towards the back to change) Gordon: “Stop what your doing Riddler, there’s no way you can win.” Riddler: “ Ah, but that’s’ where you’d be wrong (strikes Gordon with his cane).” (Pulls Gordon up by collar and says) “Just in case you think Gotham PD will make it over here your wrong, I had my henchmen fill the place with knockout gas, they won’t wake up until a while and then it will be too late for you.” (Dispenses sleeping gas from his cane as Gordon hits the floor) Riddler: “ Oh and just in case the audience intends to escape, notice anyone who tries to get up from their seat will trigger an alarm informing my henchmen to electrify whom ever gets up, starting now!” (Laughs in a sinister way…. And out from the shadows comes Batman) Riddler: “ Ah Batman this truly wouldn’t be challenge without a visit from you now wouldn’t it?” Batman: “ I’m not here to play games Riddler.” Riddler: “ I’m afraid you have no choice, if you try to save either Yinzy or Misty Ree, one of them shall parish and I’m afraid no gadget you have, can prevent it from happening!” (Batman charges towards Riddler) Riddler: “ You have much to learn (pulls out exploding question marks) and too much time spent dodging questions will result in your failure!” (Hits Batman and he dodges them) Batman: “ The game ends now Riddler!” Riddler: “ Really? The game has just begun! (Tries to zap Batman, he dodges) Batman: “ I have to find a way to save them both…. (Riddler’s henchmen charge towards Batman while his henchwoman helps Riddler out) (Riddler’s henchmen tackle Batman as he stumbles to the ground) Riddler: “ I think I’ve finally gotten your attention. So what will it be Batman? Do my challenge or have them meet their demise?” Batman: “ I’ll take your challenge….” Riddler: “ Good to hear, attach this wristband to yourself.” (Riddler’s henchwoman gives Batman the wristband) Riddler: “ That wristband will tell you the whereabouts of all the hidden riddles throughout Gotham, but if you solve a riddle wrong the wristband automatically calculates the wrong answers… once you get three wrong, let’s just say the results won’t be pretty.” Batman: “ Why Riddler? I can simply remove the this or deactivate the system?” Riddler: “ True, but I wouldn’t… the wiring on the wristband will cause an electric current to run throughout your body if you tamper with it, and if you remove it, it will realize and will automatically cause Yin and Misty Ree to fall towards their fate, don’t you just love what thermal technology can do…oh and one more thing, you have until midnight to accomplish your task, I’d hurry if I were you that only leaves you an hour!” (Batman noticed Batgirl going Backstage and smiles, he launches his grapple towards the ceiling and makes his escape) [glow=green,2,300]I hope the ending will change my score, I really want to make a good Riddler story Stay tuned for PART 4. [/glow]
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Post by Hush Riddler on Feb 27, 2006 21:24:20 GMT -5
Its good. Its very good! I like that you put DN in there, but why not meee? J.K., I'm your partner and thats good enough!
I'm really sorry guys that I havent posted my Joker story yet, but I promise you it'll be a barrel of laughs (as Joker used to say in TNBA), I do indeed intend to make this story a comedy, its a Joker story about Joker putting crime behind him and trying to lead a salvagable career. Imagine the fun I can have with THAT
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Post by ??The Riddler?? on Feb 27, 2006 21:41:52 GMT -5
Aww partner don't worry I'm sure my ending will have something you'll look forward too. *smirks* You just gave me an idea, thanks for sticking by my side old friend.
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Post by Dark Nightwing on Feb 27, 2006 23:39:07 GMT -5
I look forward to the fourth part. Make sure this one wraps it up though. No more WAITING.
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Post by blinker on Mar 1, 2006 13:10:01 GMT -5
This isn't to bash the show. This for you members to come up with ideas to improve the show. Theres a possible theory that this show will end at Season 5 by shows stabndards these dfays. So I thought if you guys post what you want to happen to change, and Matt would and hopefully get anyone who's part of LoG and in anyway part of TB (show, comic etc.), we can probably get somewhere.
I'll go first. This was also posted in the Matsuda thread:
- I want to add the more realistic aspects of the show's comic title (real guns for example) and the darker themes presented in the DTV into the show. That way, the show improves and matures more so and the BTAS hardcore fans can like it better than before with less to no problems.
- a redesign of the guns to make them less "toy-like"
- Joker needs to wear shoes.
- more insight on Bruce's parents and maybe an episode focusing more on them. and let's have Kevin Conroy as Thomas Wayne and Adrienne Barbeau as Martha Wayne like in BTAS.
- if the censors restrict mostly everything that is TB's potential that is mostly or all found in the comic and the DTV and maybe because its a morning show instead of a night show which JLU was, can the show be aired later instead of earlier?
- I want Catwoman to know Bruce is Batman or Bruce finding out Selian is Catwoman. But I would hate it if he just said "she's a criminal, needs to be in jail". No. He should open up to her and go into the batcave, she gets surprise on how he is and he goes "we should talk". Thats different, better and she knows thanks to HUSH, why not this? Kids know love.
- After seeing Thunder, and the fact that no military of any kind appeared, and Gordon arguing with Grange that Batman would know what to do to stop Zeus, I have this idea for an episode in Season 4:
There should be an episode focusing on Gordon only. The board of directors for the police are questioning Gordon's motives on emergencies and having the Batman do the work that is a cop's job. Also, they're questioning Batman and his equipment which they believe they stole and him putting two kids (Batgirl & Robin) in danger with him.
Now this shouldn't end with the board in a midde of Batman fighting and proving them wrong, doesn't work. In the end, Gordon should be in the board meetings and gives each member files on people would faced situations near death only to be saved by Batman Like "this girl was kidnapped by a rapist (just an idea, I know they can't say that), she would've been a goner since the police didn't get there in time. She's alive because Batman was there to save her."
After all that, Gordon asks them "Ask yourself this; this city's crime rate is lower than it was years ago over ONE reason, you wanna get rid of that reason?" Then they agree. The End.
- This show needs to be matured more and needs to get darker now.
- The great episodes, that even TB-haters like, are only Rubberface of Comedy, Clayface of Tragedy, Riddled, Strange Minds, The Laughing Bat, and TBvD. To name a few. Why isn't the whole show with this quality and just portions to just some/few episodes?
- Is needs to happen and asked/answered: remember that promo for TB that had a different look and edge than the show is? I want that in the show THAT WAS BETTER. Why wasn't that used and can that be used in the show now?
- I have another idea for thr future since I heard in an interview that Matsuda is trying to put in dark elements as the show progresses, another reason why I say they should it now and quick before its time is up. Here is my Season 4 - DTV - Season 5 idea:
Since Robin is in season 4, how about in the DTV you introduce both Jason Todd and Tim Drake as the next two Robins (Tim - Robin, Jason - Kid Robin, the actual names to use and with Tim wearing the OYL costume and Tim wearing the original Tim drake/Grayson in BTAS and TB uniform) with Dick Grayson being Nightwing either by the end of season 4 or in the DTV.
And since you can get away in DTVs, kill off Jason in the DTV leaving Tim the only current Robin and in season 5, you have Batman, Nightwing, Batgirl & Robin. And Batman should be DARK.
I'm kinda not the only one but others like my friend, T.N., feel the same way. This is what he said:
The Batman, a show that i was hyped for when i first heard about it. A chance for my favorite super hero, the dark knight, to get another shot at cartoons. Then waking up early to watch it on a saturday morning i found myself incredibly disappointed.
The complete lack of a story and the drastic change of the dark knight was unbearable. The Batman, dark angel of gotham city, was standing around playing basketball and having nachos...not the dark knight i know and love. I went along with the show in its rocky first season.
Then found myself tuning in for season 2 as well. Season 2 was suprisingly much better than season 1 and after watching season 2 i found myself enjoying the show more. Season 3 came by and it was also good but even though i had lost my intense hate for the show, there were many things i wanted to change about it still. By season 3 bruce wayne had stopped eating the ridiculous nachos and had become a tad bit more serious. but id like to express, in detail, some things i would love to change about The Batman.
1) It seems to me that the story for every single episode is rushed just to get bruce in the suit and punching away at the villains. Sometimes the villains arent even given motives for what they are doing.
In the episode fire and ice Mr. Freeze and Firefly are teaming up...for god knows why. Thats not really explained. The show doesnt even go as far as to show us how they came to become a team for this episode. The episode just starts out with firefly helping steal a device that will help Mr. Freeze freeze the entire city...well thought and original isnt it? Mr. Freeze freezing gotham? Lame and not thought out. Again badly executed story just so that they can have an excuse to get firefly and mr.freeze to battle it out with batman.
Fire and ice may just be one of the best example to this because it sums up all that im saying creating a lame story just to get to the (admittedly good) fighting scenes. it'd be good if they spent more than just 5 minutes on the story and dropped the other 20 on all action. all the characters(including batman himself) feel very undeveloped and could each use some sort of an origin episode such as the two face two parter from btas.
Then we have villains like the penguin and the joker who, are by nature, supposed to be more "enemies to batmans mind" because no chance in hell could penguin really take on the batman in hand to hand fighting. the joker is supposed to be so crazy and un-melodic in his crimes that it gives the worlds greatest detective something to think about. but here penguin is reduced to stealing statues that look like penguins and jokers crimes are lame re-hashes of things we've seen before like laughing gassing the city.
Did I also forget to mention that in The Batman all batmans villains are suddenly black belts in several fighting arts? yes, that includes the penguin who is so rotund hed have a hard time punching you straight and the joker who is just supposed to be crazy. its quite painful to watch penguin do double back flips and matrix style triple kicks and watch joker actually give batman a beating in hand to hand fighting. it'd be great if we could stop making the villains martial artists and start making them smarter instead
2) Any non batman fan, by watching The Batman, would get the impression that the batman is a wimp! in every episode he relies on a load of gadgets in order to keep things in check. the real batman can take on the huge killer croc without having to resort to a load of gadgets, but this batman seems to rely more on his batarangs rather than the fists he sought so long to master. it'd be great to see batman reduce the amount of gadgets he uses.
3) after watching several episodes i have convinced my self that they should draw the vehicles in this show like they did in btas. the "CG" (if you can call it that) in The Batman looks terrible. even if they didnt animate the cars so smoothly it'd still look better than the big retarded looking cg they use in this show
4)my last problem with this show is the inclusion of the bat girl. im not saying its the fact that bat girl is on the show thats bad but rather how shes portrayed and how she acts. in the episodes she seems more interested in having fun which is great and all but just like they did with robin in btas, by keeping him laughing out of action and then more serious IN action, they could have done with bat girl. i think bat girls inclusion takes the sillyness of the show to a level where it didnt have to reach.
if any of these problems were to be fixed it would make The Batman a much greater show, not only to me, but to bat fans all over.
Anyone else might wanna share what theyw ant to improve?
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Post by ??The Riddler?? on Mar 4, 2006 16:56:17 GMT -5
I'm still coming up with a part 4 I don't want the ending to be lousy, and don't worry DN it will finish the story . Thanks for all your support I hope Joe-Destructive comes back his stories are great, along with everyone elses! Well seeing I don't write stories alot now and then I think I'll just stick to being a judge. Stay tuned for part 4 same bat time, same bat channel. ;D
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Post by blinker on Mar 4, 2006 22:24:32 GMT -5
Here is my idea:
Instead of a Superman show following The Batman, why not SUPERMAN/BATMAN.
Now, I would guess and say that maybe a 2-part (3 doesn't seem to be what the crew of TB wants since TB has had 2 2part episodes) story of how Superman and Batman met would be nice to start the show on.
Plus, this would be a good idea to NOT do a similar take Timm did with a Superman show following a Batman show. And this show would be on WB's two most prized franchises that are making a comeback: Batman Begins & Superman Returns.
This is how the show would go: it would be exactly like the comic series of the same name started by Jeph Loeb. Just like that comic; the show would focus on Superman and Batman and adventures that tie them together. But it WOULDN'T be about those two, Wonder Woman appears, The Flash appears, so does Green Lanterns. The enite JLA, JSA, Outsiders and Teen Titans appear as well and either interact with them, or each other. Or be part of the storyline.
And that comic, and this show, will double for Supergirl's origin and have episodes on Supergirl and on other World's Finest besides Superman and Batman like: Superboy & Robin, and Power Girl and Huntress.
The show would take place a few years down the line after The Batman ended. That would make sense with these teams and more superheroes appearing in this show. Since his statue appeared in Grundy's Night (Yes, it was there), Superman had already appeared by TB's time.
Now, that story on how they first met is up to them (the crew). Because again, its a few years after TB so anythign that could've happened already did. And maybe that has. Either way; here's a plotline of that:
Lex Luthor is looking at expanding his empire; with his first target being Gotham CIty's Wayne Enterprises. Bruce doesn't want to buy out his company, nor work in any way with Luthor because he knows him from Metropolis' papers.
It turns out he (as Batman) isn't investigating why Luthor wants Wayne's company, Superman is as well. While they don't get along on each question the others actions; they both have a common interest to stop Luthor and his new plans that invovle a new villian: Ra's Al Ghul.
The first episode(s), or opening, would show both Superman's and Batman's origins back to back. Exactly like its shown int he first pages of Superman/Batman #1. After the story of how they met (again, up to them), then I would want them to do a adapation of the arcs of the comic. Since the comic itself is ending its current arc this month; they have four now and 2 going on 3 stand alone stories. By the time they manage to do this, 1-2 more arcs would be either completed or about to be and a new one would then begin.
So they have enough stories from that comic to do adapations and exhance the scripts for episode length.
So: a SUPERMAN/BATMAN show following THE BATMAN. Exactly like the comic from its stories, to having more heroes not just those two, and to the fact that theres more World's Finestes.
What do you think?
Jeff Matsuda; if you haven't seen this: WHY HAVEN'T YOU! This is good.
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Post by The Dark Knight on Mar 5, 2006 10:49:00 GMT -5
I have yet to read all of the stories on this page, when I get the time, Ill post my reviews
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Post by Hush Riddler on Mar 15, 2006 18:50:31 GMT -5
[shadow=green,left,300]Okay, here is my JOKER episode, so enjoy... This took me quite a long time to write, so I hope you enjoy it. There is no Riddler in it (sorry partner...). For a long time this story had a middle and strong ending to it, but I couldn't figure out how to make it start, so enjoy. The episode follows the "The Batman" storyline, and the episode is called JOKER'S BIGGEST JEST[/shadow]
We open on Arkham Asylum, where the camera pans past many of the inmates' cells; Ventriloquist/Scarface, Spellbinder, Clayface, Riddler, etc. We come across the Joker's cell to find it... EMPTY!
We are later taken to Dr. Strange's office, where he is looking over a file of one of the cell mates, and says to an unknown person sitting across from his desk.
Strange: Well sir, you've been healthy for 18 months, that is long enough for the state, and long enough for the asylum as well. By what alias will you travel under now though?
Man: Don't worry about that. I'm opening my own dentistry clinic downtown. I've been studying the field for these past few months, and I'm off to take my exam. Thank you for the start though.
Strange: Oh, not worries. $25,000 isn't much sir, and after all, there isn't anything that pleases me more then seeing my favorite patient leaving this place... a free man. (The light finallly falls on the man's face and we see it is... Joker!)
Joker: You said it, doctor. Thank you again.
We have Comissioner Gordon and Barbara Gordon walking down a hallway to the dentist's office.
Barbara: Dad, its a waste of time. I don't see why I have to go back to the stupid dentist after I've gotten my braces off! What's the dentist's use after that?
Gordon: Just sit in the waiting room until the doctor calls you, I've got to go pick up some brocolli for dinner tonight.
Barbara: Oh great, first the dentist, now veggi for dinner. This day is disgusting. (Commissioner Gordon leaves, and a woman calls in Barbara. She enters the dentist's office.)
Dr. Jay: Have a seat. I'll be right with you.
Barbara: Take as long as you want. I really hate going to the dentist.
Dr. Jay: Oh come now, child. What in this crime-ridden city is more beautiful (he turns around and reveals himself as the Joker) then a nice, big smile? (Ironically, he does not emit a Joker-ish cackle.)
Barbara: You're... you're the... Joker? What do you want with me?
Dr. Jay: Oh please child, I'm not the Joker anymore. I've bid farewell to a life of crime. Now please, sit down and allow me to examine your teeth.
Barbara: No! You're... you can't!
Dr. Jay: Oh please... Just sit. Look, nothing up my sleeves, I'm not holding any drills... just sit still!
Barbara: (Barbara thinks for a second, then decides to sit.) Okay... no funny business though.
Dr. Jay: Hmm... a cavity here... well, not so bad. The last patient had five or six cavities... Have you had braces?
Barbara: Yes, why?
Dr. Jay: Well, your teeth are still somewhat crooked... Oh well... Here, now take the flouride... Okay now just suck out all the access siliva with this little suction tube... Okay, be right back. (Joker leaves and comes back with some paper in his hand.) Okay, let me just take this out... Here, allow me to... (Joker srpays something in Barbara's mouth.)
Barbara: UGH! What was THAT?
Dr. Jay: Well, its my own little injection I invented... It should take care of any faults left by braces immediatly. But, you'll need to keep spraying once a week for about a month. Here is a perscription for the second part. And here is a bill for your parents. Thank you and good day. NEXT!
Batgirl swings in next to Batman, who is perched on top of a building
Batgirl: Hey Bats. Who is it this time.
Batman: Rupert Thorne's men... It looks like they're smuggling illegal substances from the harbor for Thorne to give to Bane... It will be an added component to Bane's already increasingly dangerous serum... *Beepbeep* What's that?
Batgirl: oh, just my timer. My dentist gave me this stuff that will make my teeth straighter... These tablets are the other half of the medicine. *She swallows the tablets.* Guess who my dentist is?
Batman: Who...?
Batgirl: Joker.
batman: WHAT?!
Batgirl: Hahaha! Yea, Joker. Apperently he's been healthy for 18 months...
Batman: What did he give you?!! (Batman seizes the bottle and looks at Batgirl, who has begun laughing uncontrolably, and she slowly gets a sickening Joker grin across her face.) JOKER!!
We are in the Batcave, where Batman is working on developing an antidote to Joker's serum.
Alfred: A visitor in the Batcave sir... Oh my... Batgirl?
Batman: Yes. I think its time she learned everything.
Alfred: Surely sir, your not...
Batman: I can't shake it out of her. I've given her the equipment, I think its time I gave her access to the cave as well.
Alfred: Well, as for her... lovely smile?
Batman: Joker's dosed too many people too many times with his Joker venom. I think its time I got a large amount of this antitoxin for future victims.
Alfred: Well, what about catching him in the act? Should I schedule a dentist appointment for Bruce Wayne?
Batman: No... this time, we'll need outside help... I'm calling in a specialist....
We are back at Arkham Asylum, inside Clayface's cell. Batman enters.
Clayface: Whadaya want, Bats?
Batman: Clayface... I'm back, and I'm still trying to help you.
Clayface: What's it gonna take for you to get it through your head, Bats? I'm beyond help, remember?!
Batman: Bennet, I am helping you get out of this kookoo's nest! If you can help me nail Joker, you're getting a one-way ticket out of here. I've talked to Dr. Strange and Commissioner Gordon, they both agree. Of course, we don't have any proof that Joker has done this, but this is where you can come in.
Clayface: Joker... That madman... I hate that slimeball... Fine. I'll help you.
Batman: Thank you Bennet. However, you need to be in human form, and you can't be Ethan Bennet, otherwise the Joker will recognize you. (Clayface sees an Asylum doctor walking by and transforms into him.) Lets go. (Clayface walks out and Batman follows. Batman sees a room marked *Authorized Personal Only*. We don't see whats inside, but Batman sighs and says:) I'm sorry Ethan.
We have the doctor from Arkham (Clayface in disguise) walking into Joker's office.
Joker: Ahh, come in, come in Mr. Gram. Say, don't I know you from somewhere.
Clayface: Ahh, no... No, I don't think so...
Joker: Ah well. I get that alot. Have a seat... Mhm... I see. Mr. Gram, you have a few decaying teeth right here. Its not your fault, but its just aging. Here, take this spray I developed, it will whiten within the month. However, you'll need this medicine for it to take full effect. Take this perscription and OFF! (Clayface punches Joker, morphing back into his regular Clayface self.) Mercy! CLAYFACE!
Clayface: JOKER! I knew it! You can't stop can you? You're sick, Joker! You've never been able to stop! I'm putting an end to you once and for all! (He swings his fists around, which are shaped like spiked balls, crushing everything in the dentist's office.)
Joker: Help! Wild man! Clay man! Psycho man! (He runs into Batman in the doorway.) BATMAN! Help, he's a lunatic!
Batman: Bennet! We had a deal!
Clayface: Deal's off, Bats! Joker is MINE this time!
Batman: I'm so sorry it had to come to this Bennet... (Batman unveils his fists, showing he is wearing Mr. Freeze's special freezing gloves... and he blasts Clayface full force.)
Clayface: No! NO! NOOOOOO!!! (Batman looks sadly at Ethan Bennet, drops the gloves, and realizes Joker is gone.)
Batman: Clown.... (He tracks Joker down to the abandoned "LAFFALOT" comedy club, where he starts looking around and all he can here is Joker's voice.)
(Joker jumps down from the stage beams onto Batman, dropping a sandbag on his head.)
(Joker attacks Batman with a dentist's drill, which Batman shoves the butt of the drill against Joker's stomach. Joker falls over, and Batman throws a Batarang, and a giant smile is dropped from overhead onto Joker's head.)
The police are outside the old comedy club, and Commissioner Gordon backs into the shadows to talk to Batman.
Gordon: I always did like this club, its where I met my wife. I never understood why they closed it though. Thanks for dealing with Joker. But, one question. Why bring Clayface into this?
Batman: (He is silent for a moment.) Just trying to give an old friend one last chance...
Meanwhile, back at ARKHAM...
Joker: Thanks for listening doctor... This one put me through alot of pain...
Doctor: I understand. And I truly did believe you wanted to reform...
Joker: Batman, he always gets in the way... Its always been Batman. I was set up doc!
Doctor: I believe you! But... Batman did beat you up pretty badly, so I say that you should stay here and rest... puddin'. (We see the doctor's face and it is a woman. This is doctor Harleen Quinzel.)
Joker: Thank you Doctor Quinzel, you are such an angel...
Harley: Please, call me Harley. (She exits Joker's cell and we zoom out of Arkham, hearing Joker's sick laugh the whole way.)
THE END
Questions, comments? I know the dentist song was corny, but I decided to throw it in there for a good laugh. Feedback, please, as always. Thanks!
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Post by ??The Riddler?? on Mar 15, 2006 19:12:28 GMT -5
My my partner here's a riddle for you. Who is awesome without a doubt- helps all others who seem to pout- a genius, a friend, a story writer as well- for who you are no one can tell- you are the man of mystery, who's lives the life of crime- through all the days you've been kind will last forever in time. Who am I?I thought I'd make this for you partner, your an awesome story teller and I really don't know what I am. ;D But, excellent story. 10 out of 10
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Post by Hush Riddler on Mar 15, 2006 19:23:50 GMT -5
[shadow=green,left,300]WOW partner thanks alot. I am very touched.... thanks. Wow. Thanks for that I feel good. Anyone else? Partner... you may not know what u are but I do... you are the coolest "Kat" in LoG. LET'S HERE IT FOR HER FOLKS!![/shadow]
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Post by ??The Riddler?? on Mar 15, 2006 19:26:18 GMT -5
Oh I get it that's awesome, thanks partner. I am trying to come up with an ending for my story that will interest you all. I will try my best to get it done Saturday I'll be able to seeing I finished playing 'The darkest faerie' ;D.
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