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Post by judderman on Dec 8, 2004 9:44:32 GMT -5
The following is the first 5 pages of the graphic novel I am working on called Batman: the Wolfman of Gotham. I would love some feedback on this if you could. I am not submitting any of the storyline, just the artwork for now and would love to know what you think. I may add the pages on as I do them and hopefully you should understand most of whats going on without any text. Enjoy and thanks in advance. Regards John
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Post by reideen1313 on Dec 8, 2004 10:25:46 GMT -5
I love the bunnies! Please make them a continuing thread in the book! ;D
The wolf is excellent. I really like the line work that you've put into it. The backgrounds that you've done are very nice. The brickwork all lines up, there is a texture to the art. The use of shadow is very good.
In the first panel, I would say the character is too over muscled in the torso area, and his legs are out of proportion. The problem with the legs is there in the 5th panel also. They are too short in that panel.
The final scene - with the man's hand in the pool of blood (I'm assuming) is very well done - good perspective with both the pool and the arm/hand.
All in all, very good work. I'd like to see more.
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Post by judderman on Dec 8, 2004 11:05:28 GMT -5
Chears mate, I appreciate your honesty and keen eye for detail. I had alot of fun creating these pages and am looking to do a complete storyline which, as I said will be posted stage by stage. You are correct about the final scene being the gentleman in question and thankyou for the comment about it. Also, I dont know how the 'Bunnies' became a part of the story but I too, like them and plan to incorporate them at every given opportunity as they make me grin stupidly! LOL!!! Thanks again John
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Post by Faithfulbutler on Dec 9, 2004 18:16:17 GMT -5
Now you have a talent that i could only dream of.I can't even get stick figures right LOL. Seriously though,very nice work!I like the concept of the story and am dying to see more.Definitely keep the Bunnies,every artist has their own little quirky touches,why not Bunnies for yours? You have a very real talent there,keep at it please!
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Post by judderman on Dec 13, 2004 8:42:47 GMT -5
Thanks FB. Still working on the storyline and draughting the next few pages.
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Post by Robin on Dec 13, 2004 17:09:05 GMT -5
That is some awesome pencil work! Great job.
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Post by tmthomas on Dec 17, 2004 21:18:15 GMT -5
Hey Looks Great! I agree that you should keep the bunnies as a running theme. Keep it up man!
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